The Crimson Blush Assignment

Submitted by Allyson D. on Thu, 07/05/2018 - 04:50

Published on Kindle. : )
May 4th, 2020
https://www.amazon.com/Crimson-Blush-fantasy-short-story-ebook/dp/B087Z…

Author's age when written
23
Genre
Fiction
Notes

This actually began as a presentation for one of my classes in college. The story was about a health clinic meeting the needs of its diverse clients. I received a pretty good response, but sadly I didn’t think of a story for this fantasy world till my last term, and it was for another assignment about college success. Since then I rewrote it.

Comments

Damaris Ann

Wed, 07/11/2018 - 04:48

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I just skimmed the very beginning and after seeing what type of story it is I just have to say YESSSSSS I CANT WAIT THIS GENRE MAKES ME SO EXCITED YESSSSSSSSS.

And with that I’m going to get some sleep and then read tomorrow when I’m fully awake and can therefore fully appreciate the whimsy and innocence of this fantasy/fairytale.

I don’t thrive off of chaos: chaos thrives off of me.

James

Fri, 07/13/2018 - 20:00

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... to be continued some day?
This was a very imaginative and interesting story. I like plants and wish I had more time to get into studying botany. Having a world populated by different types of creatures / races specifically designed to contribute their efforts to growing plants is intriguing.
And then, the ending... that caught me by surprise! It totally makes sense, and yet at the same time I didn't see it coming. :)

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"The idea that we should approach science without a philosophy is itself a philosophy... and a bad one, because it is self-refuting." -- Dr. Jason Lisle

Damaris Ann

Fri, 07/13/2018 - 20:14

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Okay, I just read and wow. Wow wow wow. You did not disappoint me!! I have to say, this is my favorite fairytale I’ve ever read. Well done! Bravo! Please write more stories like this. :) and I’d LOVE to see a sequel about Smalls. :)

There were a few misspelled words, as well as some conversations that were a bit unclear when it came to who was talking when, but those things could be fixed after a few minutes of editing. Your storytelling skills are INCREDIBLE and I’m so glad you wrote this piece. Moral pieces told in such a whimsical theme are amazing. :)

I don’t thrive off of chaos: chaos thrives off of me.

Allyson D.

Sat, 07/14/2018 - 16:47

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Thank you both so much! I’m glad you enjoyed it. Kind of funny how it turned out. Smalls’s mysterious gift was an unexpected turn, not my original plan. When I first wrote this for my college paper I actually had to stop it in the middle because I had a page limit of five pages. So for a while it didn’t have an ending at all. I’m not sure how to continue it yet, though I have slight idea somewhere in my head.
Thanks for pointing that out, Damaris. I’ll see if I can make this a bit better soon.
Thanks! : D

Trust in the Lord with all your heart

Allyson D.

Wed, 07/18/2018 - 21:17

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Hey Libby! : D
I’m glad you enjoyed it. I haven’t decided yet. I’m currently working on another project.
That being said, I have a slight idea...the Crimson Secret? Droplet struggles with the knowledge of Smallfoot’s inexplicable gift...and she sees something she’s not supposed to see...? I don’t know. : )

Trust in the Lord with all your heart